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October 2008 
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Posted on Apr 6th, 2008
by 
Bahamut
Bahamut
(This is a poem I wrote a while back. I've posted it up in one of the pods I'm in, but I think it's good enough for me to put up here. I think I might put up more of my poetry here too. I like it when others read my work and critique it.)
The Girl
Golden hair waving in the wind,
shining in the light of the sun,
long, straight, and perfect.
It smelled like apples.
Emerald green eyes gazing
into mine, peering into my soul,
seeing all and reflecting the warmth
of the sun upon my heart.
Hands soft as velvet sliding
across my palms of sandpaper,
following the face aboard the train.
I chased after you as you waved
out the window.
Over the horizon you went,
and along with you went my love.
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Asha'man,
I appreciate our thoughts about love. In the persona you have chosen for the poem(I don't know if it is your true feelings), it is like you are saying that he expected and felt that in the one that he saw the most beauty, was the one that made him feel love–or that he loved her, and because he loved her she became the most beautiful to him. Whatever the case, he may have hoped that someone that he adored so thoroughly would never leave him. And because she did, his heart broke. –You should definately share more of your poetry. I think it was excellent…
Tima